Saturday, July 15, 2017

Remember the Good parts of Writing when you are Editing

Lots of big things going on here. Just turned my MG manuscript to a real editor. ðŸ™‚ Expensive, but exciting!
While I wait to hear back which editor is a good match, I am diligently working on my YA Romance/Mystery, “Diving for Love.” I have alot of work to do after beta-readers just returned critiques back to me. Hundreds of things to fix, but I love this story. And the key part of getting critiquing is remembering your favorite parts while trudging through the mud of fixing the other problems. So as a treat to myself as I edit, and hopefully to my readers, here are some of my favorite lines from the chapter where my MC meets the love interest’s mom.
The door opened, and a lady dressed in a knee-length black dress and clickety hills peered out at me. Skinny as a fishing rod with short blonde hair that fell in waves around her shoulders. She was the perfect opposite of a modern housewife. Manicured nails that had probably never touched more than mineral bath water, hair that was completely in place, and clothes that never went on sale.
Her smile was spread tightly on her face, and I was sure I could have drawn it with a lip-liner pencil.
Mrs. Williams face straightened immediately and the fake smile came back. “Well aren’t you as cute as a bug.” Her sugary, sweet temperament set my teeth on edge, and I couldn’t help picturing myself in bug form, being squashed by her stiletto heels.
A few seconds after, the door swung open and I turned to see Mrs. Williams coming toward me, her green eyes flashing. She looked like a bull ready to attack, and I didn’t want to become aftermath on Sam’s front lawn.

Wednesday, July 12, 2017

First Chapter Happiness

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I love starting a new writing project. It’s new and exciting, and not tainted by opinions and red ink. This past week, I have started working on my new idea that I have been brainstorming for almost six months now. While my beach story is out to beta-readers, I get to focus elsewhere for a while, and it’s like a breath of fresh air. In celebration, I’d love to share my first chapter with you. It’s an adult romance that will end of being a cross between While you Were Sleeping and Sleeping Beauty. You’ll love it! Here goes!
Chapter 1 ðŸ™‚
“Girls, where are you?” my boss yelled through the radio speaker.
I looked up from my spreadsheet where I had been drafting a proposal to a new client. Brittany, the other assistant, smiled at me and shook her head. I shrugged, but knew exactly what she was thinking.
“I need help with a client.”
I stared at the grooved edges of my walkie talkie. I waited a few seconds for my friend to volunteer, but she was still studying her nails. Fine. I needed more face time with the boss anyway.
“On my way,” I said, shutting off my computer.
“On my way,” Brittany said, mimicking me with wide purple lips. Today she wore purple lip liner with an opal pink shine in the middle. Every day she experimented with a new color. On most people, it made them look like a fruity unicorn, but with her wiry black hair and quirky personality, it fit.
I glared at my best friend and partner-in-crime, though I couldn’t be upset if she was allowing me more opportunities to do favors for the boss.
“Be right back,” I said, dropping the radio on our joined desks.
“You know, you don’t have to do everything she asks you to do. She’s got a full staff.”
I fixed the collar on my shirt and straightened my hair. “Yes, but I don’t know why when all she needs is me.” I winked and pulled back in my chair, slamming into the back wall. I winced and shifted out of my seat as carefully as I could. It took me three more steps before I get out of our brooms closet-sized office and one hundred more before I reached Mel’s master bedroom of an office. The comparison was ridiculous.
I knocked and a little thrill of excitement coursed through me. I had been working at the resort for almost a year, and Mel was finally relinquishing some of my leash. Maybe she’d even let me take care of this client on my own, without her disapproving stares.
“Enter.” Mellie Crims didn’t bother to look up from her stack of papers as I came in, event planner and pen in hand. I waited silently, watching as her long dark tresses flowed over her shoulder and touched the edges of her desk.
Her words spilled out of her mouth and it was all I could to keep up. “There’s a customer that needs your attention at the hospital. I’m sure you are capable of doing it by yourself. Just make sure to get him to sign the waiver forms so the resort’s butt is covered. I don’t know how you don’t see a tree when you’re skiing. Amateur.”
I cleared my throat, wanting to make sure I heard her right. “Wait, is this guy a potential client? Is he booking an event at the resort?”
A flash of irritation crossed Mellie’s face. “Look I know I put you in charge over events at the resort, but we’re busy today, so all hands on deck. Go get my signatures.”
“Right away,” I said, regretting my hesitation. I left before she could add anything else to my to-do list. I bypassed the elevator and made my way to the stair entrance.  Stairs would give me the best opportunity for more steps. I looked down at my watch. 950 steps and it was only 10:00.
Even if the guy wasn’t a potential client, I would put my best foot forward. One day, I was positive Mellie would notice my dedication.
It was good to see my 2004 Honda CRV so early in the day. Most of the time, I arrived and left work when it was dark outside. It had been through a lot with me over the years.
Orange, yellow, and crimson red leaves decorated the trees as I passed through the canyon, but I just couldn’t concentrate. How could I get Mellie to see I was so much more than an errand girl? I had been hired to be the event planner for the ski resort and yet the only thing I was planning were the events on Mellie’s schedule. I had slowly become her personal assistant.
Once she graduated from some fancy Ivy League school, she was hired as General Manager and took over her daddy’s resort. She wasn’t the worst boss in terms of efficiency. We had never had so many events happening at the resort in over fifteen years. But I hadn’t brought most of that business in, and I knew Mellie thought I was incompetent. Really, I just needed a snowball’s chance in Mellie’s shoes.
Ominous clouds filled the sky over the hospital and I was glad I wouldn’t be at work when the storm hit. Still, we needed snow. We had been creating our own snow for weeks with the limited amount of snowstorms this season, and we needed a good one.
A few minutes later, I pulled into the emergency part of the city hospital and spent the next few minutes standing in line at the receptionist’s desk. I tapped my foot along with some elevator music playing in the waiting room. I just needed to be clear with Mellie my long-term goals. She had to know I was in this job for the long haul, but if she didn’t, maybe I could put that little worry to rest.
When it was my turn, I plastered a smile on my face. “Hi, I am trying to find a Joe Smith. He had an accident at the ski resort and I need him to sign some forms.”
The lady at the desk smiled politely, but I felt a wall coming up. “I’m sorry, but I can’t let you in an emergency room unless you are next of kin.”
“Oh, I totally understand that,” I said, knowing Mellie would not let me take no for an answer, “and I’ll be happy to stay outside his door until he signs the paper.”
She looked up at the ceiling and then back at me, her expression growing annoyed. “That won’t work either. Why don’t you take a seat and I’ll call you when he is released from our care.”
“Uh…”
“There’s nothing else I can do. Sorry.”
I spun on the spot, irritation rising in my neck. It would not help to appeal to her any longer. There must be other ways to reach him. I saw someone standing at the entry of the Emergency Room and crossed my fingers he would be sympathetic. He looked nice from the back with his brown crew cut, tall but muscular build. Surely he could help.
“Excuse me,” I said, tapping his white coat on the back. “I need to see my brother. Could you let me in?”
The guy spun around and I barely stumbled into the wall next to me. He caught me, albeit a little awkward, and I laughed. “S- Sorry. Must have lost my footing for a second.” I couldn’t believe it. I was staring into the face of Chace Crawford’s doppelganger. Hot!
“Uh, no problem. I’m Dr. Camden. Here, let me get this open for you.” He scanned his ID card across the side of the door and it whooshed open. “Who was it you were coming to see?”
Why had I lied to a hot doctor? “I’m Rory , and I wasn’t totally honest.”
The doctor’s eyebrows rose on his forehead, but a smile still played on his lips. “Nice to meet you. What do you mean you weren’t honest? Is it your boyfriend or something? I can’t let you back here if you’re not a family member.”
I sighed. “Yeah, no, not my boyfriend. I don’t even know the guy really, but my boss is going to kill me if I don’t get this signature. A guy had an accident at my work today, and I need him to sign some waiver forms.”
He sighed and moved further down the hall. His stride was so long, I had to walk twice as fast to keep up. “Who’s the guy, and I’ll see what I can do?”
 “Thank you. I think his name is Joe. Joe Smith.”
The doctor stopped mid-step, and since I was right behind him, I slammed into his back— his nice-smelling back, holy cow! He smelled like the Aeropostale cologne I was a little too fascinated with. He turned, unaware of my new attraction to him, his face confused and maybe angry.
“Where did this accident happen?” he said, his voice steady and low.
I swallowed hard, wondering how things could go sour so quickly. “It was a skiing accident. I work at a resort and—”
He held up a hand. “Wait, your resort? Do you know how irresponsible it was to not have proper signage on your obstacle course? My friend could have died.”
I swallowed again, not used to being yelled at by a guy. I’d take Mellie’s rantings any day over this. I decided to ignore what I could not control. “I don’t know anything about his accident, but I do need him to sign these forms. So if you’ll be so kind, please take me to him.”
“Oh, I’ll take you to him, alright. I’m sure he won’t be signing any forms though.”
I followed behind him, no longer checking him out, but wanting to doodle skulls on his nice, white lab coat.
A few seconds later, he entered a room, and I followed quickly behind so I could get a word in edgewise before he tainted my reason for coming.
Joe looked sickly white and had a large gash across his forehead covered in stitches.
Dr. Camden gestured to me and then turned to the patient. “Can you believe this? The resort sent a lackey to make you sign some waiver forms. Don’t do it, Joe. It was their fault and the resort is responsible.”
I moved from behind the doctor and tried to give Joe my warmest smile. “We are so sorry about your accident and in behalf of the resort, we wanted to apologize. Because we ask skiers to ski at their own risk, the resort really isn’t at fault. I just need you to sign these waiver forms saying the resort wasn’t at fault and I’ll be out of your hair.”
Dr. Camden shook his head and grunted. He sat on the side of Joe’s bed and checked the stitches crossing his forehead and blocking my eyesight. I glared at the back of his head. What was his problem?
“See, she says they’re not at fault. What kind of ridiculous nonsense is this?”
A nervous energy rose in my stomach. For once I wished Mellie had taken this assignment herself. 
Joe held up a hand and gestured for Dr. Camden to move. “It was not this girl’s fault. You’re going to scare the sweet thing. Look at her.”
The doctor turned to me, and what might have been a flash of compassion in his eyes, left as quickly as it came. “Sorry. This is not personal. You seem nice and all, but Joe’s my best man here.”
I nodded, and the tightness in my stomach loosened a little. I would have defended Brittany or any friend really. It really sucked being on the other side of this.
“Which resort was it, and I’ll call my lawyer to take care of this?”
Joe cleared his throat and mumbled something I couldn’t hear.
“What did you say?” Dr. Camden said, obviously not hearing him either.
It’s you fiancé’s resort, Cam. I was skiing at Mellie’s resort today.”

Tuesday, June 27, 2017

Coming to a Bookstore Near You

Playground-Treasures
Let me be clear, this baby was conceived five years ago and not the nine months I signed up for! All jokes ðŸ™‚
No, seriously, five years ago, I was teaching a fiction until to my fifth grade students and I usually write with my students while they write, so this story was born in my classroom, revised and expanded there, then taken home over the summer holidays where it underwent major surgery. Then it went through physical therapy with multiple patient, outstanding readers. After it was returned with a lot of red ink, it underwent more surgery. Wounds were opened, re-examined and fixed. This happened a few half-dozen times as I learned the writing process and became more confident in my writing voice.
And finally, this book is ready to make its big debut. So much time and effort…and tears goes into writing a piece of work, and this is one I hoped would eventually see the light of others’ eyes. ðŸ™‚
This book comes out at the end of July, so look for it and join me in celebrating the journey of writing my first book.
Hooray!

Friday, June 16, 2017

Writing....A Lonely Occupation

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Let me start this post by saying that I love writing. Always have. And that love has grown as I have learned more about the art of crafting words together. But I’ve got to be honest.
The writing world is a lonely world.
Most of the time, to get work done, a writer has to separate themselves from the people around them. That means missing out on activities, staying up or getting up early when the others are asleep, and hiding in a room to get anything done. Other writers may be more successful at getting more juice out of their squeeze, but I can’t concentrate if my kids or husband are in the same room. I have learned, the more you write, the more you improve. If I want to improve, I have to give up more time.
Time that is spent alone.
That means I spend a chunk of my day separating myself from my family. Writing, then editing, then rewriting, and then virtually crunching that attempt up like a piece of paper and starting over. Occasionally I turn to other writers for feedback and crave the attention they give, even when their words are harsh, critical, and about my writing. But oh, when someone mentions something good about my writing, it is like a bloodline.
A compliment really goes a long way.
Someone commented on own of my blogs the other day, and her thought has stayed with me ever since. It made me think of my chosen career as a teacher, a mom, and a writer. It seems every career has their unappreciated moments and a kind word goes a long way in helping someone along.
So for future reference, I wanted to build a list of ideas that readers and writers could do to serve each other in this stand-alone world we try to survive in.
  1. Attend conferences– Meet other authors, connect with people who are like-minded. It is a great way to build on your skills, too, but who really only goes for that? Okay, just kidding, most of us do, but the connecting part is also important.
  2. Share your writing, even if you think you are not good enough. It may touch someone, and that will mean the effort and lonely time away was worth it. Especially share with your loved ones around you. They should already have a vested interest, but if they don’t it’s time for them to get on board.
  3. Review others’ writing– This is a big one. We learn from other writing. If you don’t believe me, read my last post about beta-reading. This also comes in the form of reading others published writing- blogs, novels, articles. Even better, leave a review, a comment, or a message with that writer if you learned something valuable from their writing.
  4. Sign up for online and in-person writing groups. Their feedback is invaluable, and connecting with other people on a consistent basis is essential in receiving encouragement that you’re on the right track.
  5. Serve yourself by stepping away. Let’s be honest- the continual grind of the author life is taxing at times. The continual rejection, frustration of starting over, or the occasional moments when we try to compare ourselves to someone better takes a toll if we do not remember to step away and take some R&R.
I’m sure there is more I could have added to this list, but 5 seemed like a magical number today. Readers and writers, feel free to share what you do to serve in the writing world to make life a little less lonely. Thank you for taking time to read this. If you made it this far, it means I did something right.

Thursday, June 15, 2017

Beta-Reading is the Way to Go!

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Five or six years ago, I decided to write a book. I have loved writing since I was little, and the only thing I love more than writing is teaching others about writing. I am a writing teacher by trade, but I love reading others’ writing and sharing how it can be better. When I needed a partner to trade with, I started scouring Facebook for groups to share critiques with.
I found a few, some really good writers too, but their content was sometimes hard for to write. I’m religious and so it was hard to read and critique others’ writing that had heavy swearing, violence, or sexual content. I did it for a while, but afterwards, I felt like scrubbing my eyeballs, and that just wasn’t worth it to me.
I continued to look for higher caliber groups, but I could never find any with the goals I had in mind. So, I created one. I called it LDS Beta Readers. https://www.facebook.com/groups/475461645922698/
The group started with 30 members, and three years later, we are hitting our 1000 member milestone.
This group has surpassed what I ever thought it could be. Since starting, we have held so many writing events, including sprint writing contests, first chapter contests, and a query letter contest. We started a writing skills blog earlier this year. http://ldsbetareaders.blogspot.com
We’ve held two online writing conferences with authors sharing writing advice and workshops.  This year we published an anthology with 25 of our writers and we are working on publishing two more. https://www.amazon.com/Mindgames-Anthology-Compilation-Members-Readers-ebook/dp/B06X6F92RC/?tag=amazon09d4d-20
We have made lasting friendships, kept a safe sharing environment, and grown in our writing.
I have learned so much by reading and critiquing others’ writing. It’s one thing to look at your writing over and over and make it better, but it is a totally new experience to look at your writing, look at someone else’s writing that is totally different, and then look at your writing again. That is where the fun begins.  Beta-reading has helped me grow so much as a writer. Writing really is a collective art. You gather pieces that shape you into the writer you want to be. I feel so lucky to be a part of something so great!
Three cheers for beta-reading!

Tuesday, May 30, 2017

Writing is Expensive...

WRITING IS EASIER WHEN YOU HAVE MONEY…

The Love Of Money
Okay, that is not entirely true, but when the time comes that you have to pay for someone to edit your crazy ramblings, money makes all the difference in the world. You could go with a high-end editor who you trust will catch everything, or you could go with a low-end editor who you pray will catch just enough of your mistakes that your writing is not distracting to the reader.
Recently, our family has been hit by several financial responsibilities and to add to that burden, I have chosen to stay at home with the boys, eliminating our second income. If only writing paid as much and I could continue not to worry. But ah, some things must take a backseat. And so my writing must take its turn as well. I have decided to continue publishing my MG manuscript in July, but without the aid of any paid editors at this time. So basically, it will not be perfect. But I am okay with that. I never got in this business because I wanted to make money. I am a good enough writer to catch most mistakes most normal non-writer readers would notice, and so I must press on with what I have.
And oddly, I am peace with that decision. The great thing about self-publishing is that if errors are found, they can be fixed easily enough. As far as making a mark on the world although, I feel this book will not be the one, which is sad because it is amazing and full of sentimental moments that kids do not get enough of in entertaining, everyday writings of middle-grade authors.
I hope that my small base of fans will still support me and I will earn just enough to keep writing. ðŸ™‚ That’s the goal. Feed my need. Writing has become much more important since I have made the decision to stay at home. It will be my only outlet, and it will be much more personal when that writing is rejected by others. It will also push me that much more to do better and to become better.
Cheers to making the right decision, even when the world tells you it is ridiculous and hard. Cheers to writing and the brave world of self-discovery that it is.
Cheers! ðŸ™‚
Jenny

Friday, May 5, 2017

Editing is Hard....

Sometimes editing makes me want to crawl in a hole and die. 

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I just submitted my MG Novel to an editor, expensive and exciting, and I am waiting to see if they are the perfect match. While I wait, I am going through lots of edits for my YA romance/mystery “Diving for Love”.
And phew, I am in the thick of edits. Hundreds of little things to change and a handful of big rocks to mull over and apply throughout the whole manuscript. And as I make these big changes, deadly thoughts often come into a new author’s mind to give up.
It’s too hard.
They hate my writing. 
Your students write better than you do. (This one comes more than you’d think.)
And I could give up, but I wasn’t made for that!
If you are going to keep going, you have to start looking for the reasons why you love writing. And my biggest motivator is going back to those favorite chapters or scenes that you wrote that were spot on…and brilliant.
So as I continue to write in a mud puddle of inky mess, here are some brilliant one-liners from my current WIP that I love and that help me remember that I need to keep going with this writing thing. ðŸ™‚
These excerpts are pulled from the chapter where the main character is meeting her new love interest’s mom who is kind of a witch! Fun, right? ðŸ™‚
The door opened, and a lady dressed in a knee-length black dress and clickety hills peered out at me. Skinny as a fishing rod with short blonde hair that fell in waves around her shoulders. She was the perfect opposite of a modern housewife. Manicured nails that had probably never touched more than mineral bath water, hair that was completely in place, and clothes that never went on sale.
She blinked a few times before looking at the plate of cookies like they were chocolate-covered cockroaches. She noticeably gritted her teeth, making her look like a skinny horse chewing on straw.
Mrs. Williams face straightened immediately and the fake smile came back. “Well aren’t you as cute as a bug.” Her sugary, sweet temperament set my teeth on edge, and I couldn’t help picturing myself in bug form, being squashed by her stiletto heels.
A few seconds after, the door swung open and I turned to see Mrs. Williams coming toward me, her green eyes flashing. She looked like a bull ready to attack, and I didn’t want to become aftermath on Sam’s front lawn.
Comment below and I’ll message you the whole chapter ðŸ™‚

My Final Release of the Year!

Love From Left Field